Whether an effective leader should consider all his subordinates when making decisions?
(should consider)
(integrate)
(decision-making process)
Should an effective leader integrate all his subordinates into decision-making process?
From my viewpoint, it is necessary for effective leadership and team success to value subordinates' suggestions in decision-making process.
(leader’s ability)
(value subordinate’s input)
(“be integral to” replaces necessary)
In my opinion, leader’s ability to value subordinates' input in decision-making process is indeed integral to effective leadership and overall team success.
The benefits of employees' participation to decision-making lies in this can lead to loyalty of subordinates.
（involvement）
(“staff” replaces subordinate)
(earn the loyalty of …)
(impact)
The benefit of staff involvement of decision-making lies in its impact in earning the loyalty of subordinates.
Obviously, a leader who always follow his own beliefs only isolates himself from team members, leading to dissatisfaction.
(the reason for this)
(dictatorial management style)
(intolerant of)
(differing views)
(alienate)
(cause resentment)
The reason for this is obviously: A leader’s dictatorial management style and intolerant of differing views will only alienate the team members and cause their resentment.
Over time, staffs will no longer manage to achieve the leader's goal, and in extreme circumstance, they will take actions to undercut team's efforts.
(“employee” replaces “staff”)
(“committed to” replaces hard working)
(“become” replaces will)
(caution: the “and” should appeal on the first part of the sentence)
(in extreme cases)
(“and” should be considered as the sign of parallel of two verbs)
(caution: “undercut” is typically used for conveying something related with price)
(undermine)
(the effect of)
Over time, the employees become less committed to leader's goals and, in extreme cases, even take actions to undermine the effort of the team.
(it is not unheard of)
(disgruntled)
(share)
(competitor)
It is not unheard of for disgruntled employees to share information with competitors.
In such cases, a leader, without employees deserved guidance, is indeed an unqualified leader.
(use “by no means” when you want to say absolutely not)
(this case)
(worth)
In this case, a leader without an employee worth leading is, by no means, an effective one.
On the other hand, team members' involvements in decision-making process bring about enthusiasm, commitment and loyalty among them.
(involving … in)
(willing follow instructions)
(inspire … commitment to)
(work harder)
However, involving team member in decision-making process will inspire their commitment to work harder and willing follow instructions.
Effective leadership will be built when all of leader's subordinates fully committed to their leader's planned goals.
(using various kinds of form to start a sentence)
(with)
(established)
(“mission” replaces goal)
Effective leadership will be established with all subordinates fully committed to the mission set by their leader.
Another compelling reason is related with team success.
(has to do)
Another compelling reason has to do with the success of the team.
Involving employees into decision making process will enlarge leader's view on how to accomplish team missions.
(“the team” replaces employee)
(you should always think what the “will” serves to, for example “serve” or “become”)
(serve to)
(widen a leader’s vision)
(“achieve the objective” replaces “committed to the missions”)
(you should try various ways to paraphrase in order to show that you can convey in a very cohesive and detail manner with a variety of expressions)
(“regardless of” replaces “rather than”)
Involving the team in decision process serves to widen a leader's vision on how to achieve the team objective.
After all, compared with the experiences and knowledge accumulated by the whole team, a leader, regardless of how capable he is, refers from limited resources.
(the frame of reference of)
(an individual leader)
(compared to)
(cumulative)
(entire team)
After all, the frame of reference of an individual leader, regardless of how able, is limited when compared to the cumulative experiences and knowledge of the entire team.
(from all involved)
(equipped with)
(creative solutions and effective ways)
(“fulfill objectives” replaces “achieve objectives”)
Equipped with input from all involved, a leader is more likely to come up with creative solutions and effective ways to fulfill objectives.
Henry Ford, the founder of the Ford cooperation, serves as an obvious adverse example here.
(clearly)
(an example of this)
A clearly negative example of this is involved Henry Ford, the founder of the Ford Automobile Company.
After achieving phenomenal success of Model T, he became more and more self-centered and inflexible and, intolerant to differing views, refuted to improve Model T, when at the same time, other automobile manufactures were committed to innovate.
(the phenomenal success)
(“grow” replaces “become”)
(“increasingly” replaces “more and more”)
(you may try to use a none in your adverbial clause, but not a gerund)
(“discount completely any input” replaces “intolerance of differing views”)
(grow increasingly arrogate and inflexible)
(value subordinates’ input)
(“refine” replaces improve)
(“strive towards” replaces “committed to”)
(at the time when …, this structure is better than what I use, it is like when you first write night, and then give further elaboration of what night means)
(also, it’s nice to write like “discounting … and refusing …”, using concomitant adverbials here to describe what arrogate and inflexible mean)
(“completely” replaces “fully” and “all”)
(“car” replaces “automobile”)
After the phenomenal success of the Model T, he grew increasingly arrogate and inflexible, discounting completely any input from his subordinates and refuting to refine the Model T at the time when all other car manufactures were striving towards innovation.
Trust in his precise intuition of the market, Ford refused to adopt his subordinate's advice to add more features.
(we should begin a sentence like “Trusting”)
(“unerring” replaces precise)
(instinct for)
(what his believed was …)
(“urge” replaces suggestion)
(listen)
(“offer” replaces add)
Trusting in what he believed was his unerringly instinct for the market, Mr. Ford refused to listen to his subordinate's urging to offer such innovative features (generalize, first) as conventional gear shifts (detail).
By 1920s, Ford Automobile Company had already lost its dominant position, replaced by General Automobile Company.
(“Ford Motors” replaces “Ford Automobile Company”)
(“lose to”)
By the middle of the 1920s, Ford Motors had lost its dominant position to General Motors.
In this case, the unwillingness of involving subordinates into decision making brought about the losing of dominant position in car industry.
(it was …, using emphatic sentence)
(“to let … participate in” replaces “involve in”)
(cost somebody something)
From this case, we see it was his unwillingness to let his subordinates participate in decision making that cost him the dominant position in the automobile industry.
To sum up, effective leaders are willing to integrate suggestions from all team members into decision making process, which consolidates the loyalty of the team and brings about wider vision to achieve team's objectives.
(to incorporate all team members in the decision-making process)
(to let his subordinates, participate in decision making)
(integrate all his/her subordinates into the decision-making process)
(value the subordinates’ input)
(listen to his subordinates’ urging)
(discount completely any input from his subordinates)
(require)
(“incorporate” replaces “integrate”)
(board vision)
(for reasons having to do with …)
(earn team loyalty)
To sum it up, effective leadership requires the willingness to integrate all team members in decision making process for reasons (generalize) having to do with (detail) the earning of team loyalty of the team and the board vision to achieving team objectives.
